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 Post subject: URGENT HELP NEEDED FOR MY BOOK: PAPERCLIP
PostPosted: Mon Nov 19, 2012 11:21 pm 
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As you all know, I've been working on a book series since I started college, and earlier this semester I finally completed all three of them. I've been struggling to find an agent who's interested in signing me, and during this process I cam across a website called Authonomy.com and it's run by Harper Collins. What it is, essentially, is a place for unpublished authors to post their manuscripts online and to gain public praise, review, feedback, etc. Stories are bumped up on an overarching list based on this feedback. The better something is - the higher on the list it goes. The more people like it, the faster it accelerates through the list.

Authonomy enables writers to post their manuscript and start trying to get praise and attention prior to the publication phase, and it helps authors either get an agent, or attract a publisher without one. I'm free to continue submitting my manuscript to agents and other agencies despite having it posted, and at any time can remove it from the site. It's a win/win all around.

The reason I'm writing you, is to request that you help acknowledge the work on the site. If you don't have time to read it, then at the very least passing it to someone who might be interested or who knows people who can help spread the word or become involved would help either way. If you can read it, that's great! And you'll have the opportunity to rate it on a six star system, as well as post a detailed review that can help publicizing the book.

I would really appreciate it if you all could take a few moments of your time to (at the very least) spread this word to as many people as you can. If you do have the time to read it, then all the better. But anything you can do would be a great help to me.
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PAPERCLIP:

After failing to do their job, four undercover agents must fix the mistakes of the past in hopes of saving the future.


PAPERCLIP is an urban fantasy that follows four undercover agents: Cei, Tristan, Samuel, and Vincent. They failed their mission to stop a brilliant strategist and military-man, Eduard Alexandrov, from changing the political structure of the world, and must face the consequences of their actions. Cei manages to escape before anyone notices, but the others are forced to remain in their current positions and help Alexandrov on his quest to destroy all modern governments. Four years later Earth has fallen completely to its self proclaimed leader and his army of powerful spiritual creatures, called “Totems.” Cei has joined the Rebellion and devises a plan to help his former allies escape the government they work for, and fight for what they believe in once more. Tristan, Samuel, and Vincent steal the most powerful Totem in Alexandrov’s collection, and intend to deliver it to the Rebellion. But the world hates them, and fears the violence that they are capable of. Every step closer they take to the Rebellion also increases their chance for a public execution, and they soon realize that they will be responsible for toppling Alexandrov’s army on their own.

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 Post subject: Re: P.A.P.E.R.C.L.I.P -Readers requested!
PostPosted: Mon Nov 19, 2012 11:57 pm 
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if your book is anything like that damn addictive prologue,I want it :-)

90,000 isn't as overwhelming as it sounds,two Harry Potters more or less

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File sent. :)

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 Post subject: Re: P.A.P.E.R.C.L.I.P -Readers requested!
PostPosted: Wed Nov 21, 2012 9:10 am 
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story's getting more and more interesting by the minute,I think you're actually on to something

a few things that caused me to headscratch so far [spoiler tagged]

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the Russian is somewhat inaccurate (I should know)

most of the names given to the Russians aren't actually Russian
Caius/Gaius (Latin) > Cei/Kay (diminutive) (not a Russian name,no Russian equivalent but I guess Sacha works)
Shmuel (Hebrew) > Samuel (English) > Shmulik (Hebrew diminutive)
Vincentius (Latin) > Vincent (French) > Vikenty (Russian) > Kesha (Russian diminutive)

it should be Bratani (brothers/friends with sibling-like affection) NOT Druzya (friends)

Ne strelyaite v menya NOT Ne strelyai te v menya (grammatically incorrect)

Pokazivaysya, Bratan (reveal yourself, brother) NOT Vyhodi, drug (get out of the (house/car), friend)

Ubivat menya budeti? (are you going to kill me?) NOT Budete li vy menya ubit (grammatically incorrect)

Kto eto? (who is it?) NOT Kto vy? (who are you?)

one more thing,the rape scene kind of makes me wonder: was that soldier really dumb enough to want shove one of his most vulnerable organs between that struggling woman's teeth? that's like placing a sausage into a meat slicer

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PostPosted: Wed Nov 21, 2012 3:04 pm 
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Thanks so much I was actually going to ask you about that, when I get home I'll change it immediately! And I know about the names - those aren't meant to have Russian forms to them. That was actually on purpose :)

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PostPosted: Wed Nov 21, 2012 8:02 pm 
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Thanks for translating that lex - just changed up the mistakes. :) If you see any other major mistakes please let me know. ^_^

As to the rape thing - deperate times and all. :shrug:

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How far've you gotten, out of curiosity?

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 Post subject: Re: P.A.P.E.R.C.L.I.P -Readers requested!
PostPosted: Fri Nov 23, 2012 1:37 pm 
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I was very busy with school and stuff (a major reason why my birthday gift to you is a bit late) but I've read up to
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Cei reveals his past to Todd soon after their encounter with Vincent and Samuel

so regarding what I said about in my previous post about the names not making sense: never mind

what bothers me now is

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Cei's grandfather's fascination with Arthurian legends,not sure how much our world is different from the world you've created when it comes to modern history,but most people native to Russia never even heard of King Arthur,largely because they have legends and folklore of their own


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Thanks for translating that lex - just changed up the mistakes. :) If you see any other major mistakes please let me know. ^_^

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As to the rape thing - deperate times and all. :shrug:

desperate enough to get chomped ?

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Cei's maternal grandfather was English who did Business in Russia where his daughter eventually meets her husband and Cei's father. :) that gets explained a bit later though.

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As to the biting thing...I changed that bit now. 8) No more oddities.

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 Post subject: Re: P.A.P.E.R.C.L.I.P -Readers requested!
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you don't have to change anything for my sake,I just wanted Vincent to wait 10 extra seconds before taking that shot,causing that scumbag to lose more than just his prey,that's all

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hahaha, it would have been funny hmm? ^_^

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currently at chapter "Slightly Mad (World)" the plot's getting complicated by the millisecond and I'm not even quarterway through that thing,taking a break right now to work on the final details of your very late birthday gift,tell me: what color are your eyes ?

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Grey

and complicated in a good/bad way?

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PostPosted: Wed Nov 28, 2012 12:44 am 
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by "complicated" I mean "oh shit I gotta know what will happen next,have to keep reading" finished chapter 12

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now I know why Anoki acts the way he does

no complaints so far aside from a few spelling errors here and there,mostly of the then/than variety

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